This is the first paragraph from a story I'm writing.
As I have done on many such mornings, I twitched aside the curtains and surveyed the panoramic view my seventh-floor window offered. The girl was there again, a dependable Ra who ushered in the sun. She stood outside the building at a flower stand that had been set up overnight. It was not one of the more pompous ones, with each breed and family organized into neat castes. Here the plants were flung together in promiscuous abandon, with tulips married to roses and hyacinths necking with cornflowers in the breeze. She eyed the selection as children do in candy shops, and finally laid a gloved hand on a basket of lilies. The jackal-faced clerk nodded and took her money. The girl then turned and entered a taxi, which slid like a stick of butter over a hill, settling among the glossy scarabs that were gathering outside a cemetery.
What do you think?
you obviously have no idea how to write decent literature.
with that much writing already done the cannibals should have eaten her by now!
Reply:http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;...
Reply:It's good, and I really like your similes--just makes ure your sentences aren't TOO rich!
Sunday, January 8, 2012
Opinions on this poem?
Seconds old and shrieking
My blue baby
They said you couldn’t breathe
But you were warm
My blue baby
You were mine
Three years old and smiling
My blue baby
Sniffing cornflowers
They said you were all wrong
But you were all there
And my blue baby,
You were mine
Sweet sixteen and crying
My blue baby
They said you couldn’t feel
But you felt for him
And my blue baby,
You were mine
Twenty-seven and kissing
My blue baby
They said you wouldn’t last
But you were there
Dressed in white
And my blue baby,
You became his.
Opinions on this poem?
i agree with nancy - too many "blues"
other than that - i like it
Reply:I think it's very moving. But I think it would have more impact if you took out all the "blue's" until the last stanza. Make it more like a surprise to the reader. (Just my opinion!)
Reply:I understand completely where you are coming from, and where you ended up with this poem! I'll bet your daughter cried when you gave it to her at her wedding too. For that purpose it was a wonderful sentiment, for a poem to publish, it would need to be reworked, but it is beautiful as it is for why it is written. Thanks for sharing.
Reply:Its very interesting. I like it a lot.
My blue baby
They said you couldn’t breathe
But you were warm
My blue baby
You were mine
Three years old and smiling
My blue baby
Sniffing cornflowers
They said you were all wrong
But you were all there
And my blue baby,
You were mine
Sweet sixteen and crying
My blue baby
They said you couldn’t feel
But you felt for him
And my blue baby,
You were mine
Twenty-seven and kissing
My blue baby
They said you wouldn’t last
But you were there
Dressed in white
And my blue baby,
You became his.
Opinions on this poem?
i agree with nancy - too many "blues"
other than that - i like it
Reply:I think it's very moving. But I think it would have more impact if you took out all the "blue's" until the last stanza. Make it more like a surprise to the reader. (Just my opinion!)
Reply:I understand completely where you are coming from, and where you ended up with this poem! I'll bet your daughter cried when you gave it to her at her wedding too. For that purpose it was a wonderful sentiment, for a poem to publish, it would need to be reworked, but it is beautiful as it is for why it is written. Thanks for sharing.
Reply:Its very interesting. I like it a lot.
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What do you think of this poem (not mine)?
Some of you may have already read it! It's 'Litany' by Billy Collins:
You are the bread and the knife,
the crystal goblet and the wine.
You are the dew on the morning grass
and the burning wheel of the sun.
You are the white apron of the baker,
and the marsh birds suddenly in flight.
However, you are not the wind in the orchard,
the plums on the counter,
or the house of cards.
And you are certainly not the pine-scented air.
There is just no way that you are the pine-scented air.
It is possible that you are the fish under the bridge,
maybe even the pigeon on the general's head,
but you are not even close
to being the field of cornflowers at dusk.
And a quick look in the mirror will show
that you are neither the boots in the corner
nor the boat asleep in its boathouse.
It might interest you to know,
speaking of the plentiful imagery of the world,
that I am the sound of rain on the roof.
What do you think of this poem (not mine)?
It's a good example of Billy Collin's work and what has made him a popular poet, one that even non-poets know.
Reply:It is a beautiful play with images, metaphors in particular:
It is possible that you are the fish under the bridge,
maybe even the pigeon on the general's head,
but you are not even close
to being the field of cornflowers at dusk.
I'd add I'm the jigger in a blind person's toe!
It reads like a song and pleasant to the ear.
Billy had a sharp ear for that always.
Reply:i think it is funny, yet ...hm, it gives out a lot of images to play with ang i guess it can make ppl give the words a deeper thought, overall i can say i enjoyed it.
beaded necklace
You are the bread and the knife,
the crystal goblet and the wine.
You are the dew on the morning grass
and the burning wheel of the sun.
You are the white apron of the baker,
and the marsh birds suddenly in flight.
However, you are not the wind in the orchard,
the plums on the counter,
or the house of cards.
And you are certainly not the pine-scented air.
There is just no way that you are the pine-scented air.
It is possible that you are the fish under the bridge,
maybe even the pigeon on the general's head,
but you are not even close
to being the field of cornflowers at dusk.
And a quick look in the mirror will show
that you are neither the boots in the corner
nor the boat asleep in its boathouse.
It might interest you to know,
speaking of the plentiful imagery of the world,
that I am the sound of rain on the roof.
What do you think of this poem (not mine)?
It's a good example of Billy Collin's work and what has made him a popular poet, one that even non-poets know.
Reply:It is a beautiful play with images, metaphors in particular:
It is possible that you are the fish under the bridge,
maybe even the pigeon on the general's head,
but you are not even close
to being the field of cornflowers at dusk.
I'd add I'm the jigger in a blind person's toe!
It reads like a song and pleasant to the ear.
Billy had a sharp ear for that always.
Reply:i think it is funny, yet ...hm, it gives out a lot of images to play with ang i guess it can make ppl give the words a deeper thought, overall i can say i enjoyed it.
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What does your favorite outfit consist of?
I like to know peoples favorite colthing choices...mine is cornflower yellow jeans, and a silver tie around the neck (nylon like) shirt...with silver shoes and yellow belt and other accessories...{i love bright colors} sooo...what is your favorite outfit like?
What does your favorite outfit consist of?
mines high waisted shorts.
red tank top tucked in
ruffled half top.
super cute!
sometimes i add suspenders.
everyone loved it!
Reply:i love bright colors too!
i love wearing spring dresses with leggings and matching flats =] and maybe pearl or rose earrings.
Reply:My favorite outfit is when I wear my dark blue trouser pants, a high pointy boot, a long buttondown shirt, a thick shiny red belt, and usually lots of gold bangles. Or, my sweatpants and a t shirt. It depends on what I am doing that day.
Reply:Marc jacobs t shirt, black shorts, black patent sandals
Reply:Green corduroy socks with a white leather hoodie and a suede fitted Phillies hat with chain link suspenders connected to some snake skin sweatpants!
Reply:On weekdays, I am bound by corporate dress code. On the weekends, I get away from the business suits with jeans and sweatshirts or a loose-fitting tee, even top off with a baseball cap so I don't need to do my hair. Summer time, it's shorts, t-shirts, and flip flops. Lounging around or running errands in whatever is the most unstructured and comfy is heaven to me.
Reply:my favorite outfit is a jean short skirt, boots, and a white t-shirt or ripped jeans and a white or red sweater...
Reply:I like dresses because they are simple and easy to look like you care. I wear them with flats.
Reply:my skinny jeans, x-tra high converse and beatles t-shirt.
Reply:Blue jeans and a tee shirt
Reply:Teal cardigan, white cotton ruffle blouse, dark wash denim, silver necklace with green glass bead, jade beaded bracelet, black buckle flats, black nylon purse with a cute anime keychain. If I feel like it, I wear a gray floppy beret. (the knitted kind).
What does your favorite outfit consist of?
mines high waisted shorts.
red tank top tucked in
ruffled half top.
super cute!
sometimes i add suspenders.
everyone loved it!
Reply:i love bright colors too!
i love wearing spring dresses with leggings and matching flats =] and maybe pearl or rose earrings.
Reply:My favorite outfit is when I wear my dark blue trouser pants, a high pointy boot, a long buttondown shirt, a thick shiny red belt, and usually lots of gold bangles. Or, my sweatpants and a t shirt. It depends on what I am doing that day.
Reply:Marc jacobs t shirt, black shorts, black patent sandals
Reply:Green corduroy socks with a white leather hoodie and a suede fitted Phillies hat with chain link suspenders connected to some snake skin sweatpants!
Reply:On weekdays, I am bound by corporate dress code. On the weekends, I get away from the business suits with jeans and sweatshirts or a loose-fitting tee, even top off with a baseball cap so I don't need to do my hair. Summer time, it's shorts, t-shirts, and flip flops. Lounging around or running errands in whatever is the most unstructured and comfy is heaven to me.
Reply:my favorite outfit is a jean short skirt, boots, and a white t-shirt or ripped jeans and a white or red sweater...
Reply:I like dresses because they are simple and easy to look like you care. I wear them with flats.
Reply:my skinny jeans, x-tra high converse and beatles t-shirt.
Reply:Blue jeans and a tee shirt
Reply:Teal cardigan, white cotton ruffle blouse, dark wash denim, silver necklace with green glass bead, jade beaded bracelet, black buckle flats, black nylon purse with a cute anime keychain. If I feel like it, I wear a gray floppy beret. (the knitted kind).
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How many uggs do u own???????? <3?
sooooo
how many uggs do u own??
just wondering!!!!!!!!! ;)
i own:
coffee dakota uggs
chestnut dakota uggs
tobacco dakota uggs
chestnut classic tall uggs (boot)
oatmeal classic cardy
cornflower blue coquette
chestnut coquette
black tasman
orchid minnie moc
chestnut sun sparkle
*i also own:
a chestnut tasman doggie duffle
sand long glove
5 long wool double side pillows (i have 2 in my room, %26amp; 3 in my living room)
ugg sheepskin rug octo (in my living room)
ugg sheepskin rug-quarto (in my room)
~my sisters and mom hav lots of ugg stuff 2 !!!!!! but its 2 long 2 type! lol !!!
no rude comments!!!!!!!!!!!
%26lt;33333333
How many uggs do u own???????? %26lt;3?
Okay, r u ready 4 sadness.?
I don't own ANY uggs.
I luv them and think they're cute,
but I don't have the money for them.
so sad, I know.
but oh well, I got my vans, so I'm good.
:)
Reply:awww thanks.
but that's okay.
I actually prefer my skate shoes.
but oh well. Report It
Reply:I know you said no rude comments but come on, anyone can tell you're bragging.
Anyway, I have 1 pair of fake UGGs and they're way cuter, they have floral designs.
Reply:i have 2.
but some people don't have any or have one pair because thats all they can afford.
obviously you aren't one of those people.
Reply:i own 1 pair of Uggs!! i %26lt;3 them!!
Reply:Somehow, I must have inadvertently clicked into the Teen Angel forum.
Curses.
Reply:0 but my sister has a few pairs
Reply:Chesnut and Black Tall Boots, Sand regular boots, Chesnut Crocheted boots. Brown Mocs... I like to wear them in the winter. Theyre so ugly though, whatever theyre warm
Reply:I HAVE 0.
Reply:I only one pair but they are not actualy uggs they are fake ones I got from jcpenneys because I am a vegetarian and uggs use cheep wool
Reply:The answer is 0, I don't really like them but I really really want a pair!!!!!!!!! They look soooooo comfortable..
Reply:I own about 3 pairs, they are soooo cutee!! ?
Reply:None.
Reply:wow, that is a lot of animals killed. i own one pair of uggs. why do you need so many? there is NO point.
Reply:are you rich? i cant afford one pair never mind 10
Reply:6
-Pink meuiduim Uggs
-chocolate meuiduim
-uggs chestnut short
-sandtall uggs
-green crochet uggs
-black tall uggs
Reply:I own none.
Reply:Hmm ... not quite as many but close (9):
Black Ultimate Short
Chestnut/Brown LE Uptown (Kids)
Black Solvang
Brown Locarno
Brown Tasman
Chestnut Tasman
Pink Kalie
Black Kalie
Sand Coquette
Reply:None.
They're hideous.
?
Reply:If I knew what an Ugg was, then I could tell you :)
how many uggs do u own??
just wondering!!!!!!!!! ;)
i own:
coffee dakota uggs
chestnut dakota uggs
tobacco dakota uggs
chestnut classic tall uggs (boot)
oatmeal classic cardy
cornflower blue coquette
chestnut coquette
black tasman
orchid minnie moc
chestnut sun sparkle
*i also own:
a chestnut tasman doggie duffle
sand long glove
5 long wool double side pillows (i have 2 in my room, %26amp; 3 in my living room)
ugg sheepskin rug octo (in my living room)
ugg sheepskin rug-quarto (in my room)
~my sisters and mom hav lots of ugg stuff 2 !!!!!! but its 2 long 2 type! lol !!!
no rude comments!!!!!!!!!!!
%26lt;33333333
How many uggs do u own???????? %26lt;3?
Okay, r u ready 4 sadness.?
I don't own ANY uggs.
I luv them and think they're cute,
but I don't have the money for them.
so sad, I know.
but oh well, I got my vans, so I'm good.
:)
Reply:awww thanks.
but that's okay.
I actually prefer my skate shoes.
but oh well. Report It
Reply:I know you said no rude comments but come on, anyone can tell you're bragging.
Anyway, I have 1 pair of fake UGGs and they're way cuter, they have floral designs.
Reply:i have 2.
but some people don't have any or have one pair because thats all they can afford.
obviously you aren't one of those people.
Reply:i own 1 pair of Uggs!! i %26lt;3 them!!
Reply:Somehow, I must have inadvertently clicked into the Teen Angel forum.
Curses.
Reply:0 but my sister has a few pairs
Reply:Chesnut and Black Tall Boots, Sand regular boots, Chesnut Crocheted boots. Brown Mocs... I like to wear them in the winter. Theyre so ugly though, whatever theyre warm
Reply:I HAVE 0.
Reply:I only one pair but they are not actualy uggs they are fake ones I got from jcpenneys because I am a vegetarian and uggs use cheep wool
Reply:The answer is 0, I don't really like them but I really really want a pair!!!!!!!!! They look soooooo comfortable..
Reply:I own about 3 pairs, they are soooo cutee!! ?
Reply:None.
Reply:wow, that is a lot of animals killed. i own one pair of uggs. why do you need so many? there is NO point.
Reply:are you rich? i cant afford one pair never mind 10
Reply:6
-Pink meuiduim Uggs
-chocolate meuiduim
-uggs chestnut short
-sandtall uggs
-green crochet uggs
-black tall uggs
Reply:I own none.
Reply:Hmm ... not quite as many but close (9):
Black Ultimate Short
Chestnut/Brown LE Uptown (Kids)
Black Solvang
Brown Locarno
Brown Tasman
Chestnut Tasman
Pink Kalie
Black Kalie
Sand Coquette
Reply:None.
They're hideous.
?
Reply:If I knew what an Ugg was, then I could tell you :)
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Flowers for a winter wedding.?
The bridesmaids are wearing cornflower blue.
Flowers for a winter wedding.?
with that blue, its hard to give you anything like red...since you don't like yellow, then go with just a few different shades of blue! i've seen it done and its very cool, put in the bouquets some "bouquet jewelry" and your set!
Reply:White and Yellow roses. They're cheap and iin saeson year round.
Reply:White Roses with blue ribbons on them would be pretty and would match the bridesmaid dresses. What is the overall theme of the wedding. I could tell you more.
Reply:Theknot.com has some good ideas in terms of winter bouquets and all that (I'm hoping for a winter wedding myself!):
http://www.theknot.com/ch_article.html?O...
http://www.theknot.com/ch_article.html?O...
Reply:white rses with touches of yellow.
Reply:As much as I HATE pointsettias at a wedding, you may want to incorportate some white or light yellow ones if you can find them...or at least cream.
My colors were periwinkle (or cornflower) with a hint of yellow but I was married in May...
Since they are more of a summer or spring color (to me anyway), you might be able to pull of the potted points to give it more of a Christmassy effect...they would be pretty anywhere.
Good luck and congrats!
Reply:What exactly is your question? Can you give a bit more detail?
Reply:I will prefer roses red roses
Reply:http://www.wedding-flowers-guide.com/blu...
Reply:congrats! =]
id go with white and light purple because purple looks absolutely beautiful with blue
goodluck
Flowers for a winter wedding.?
with that blue, its hard to give you anything like red...since you don't like yellow, then go with just a few different shades of blue! i've seen it done and its very cool, put in the bouquets some "bouquet jewelry" and your set!
Reply:White and Yellow roses. They're cheap and iin saeson year round.
Reply:White Roses with blue ribbons on them would be pretty and would match the bridesmaid dresses. What is the overall theme of the wedding. I could tell you more.
Reply:Theknot.com has some good ideas in terms of winter bouquets and all that (I'm hoping for a winter wedding myself!):
http://www.theknot.com/ch_article.html?O...
http://www.theknot.com/ch_article.html?O...
Reply:white rses with touches of yellow.
Reply:As much as I HATE pointsettias at a wedding, you may want to incorportate some white or light yellow ones if you can find them...or at least cream.
My colors were periwinkle (or cornflower) with a hint of yellow but I was married in May...
Since they are more of a summer or spring color (to me anyway), you might be able to pull of the potted points to give it more of a Christmassy effect...they would be pretty anywhere.
Good luck and congrats!
Reply:What exactly is your question? Can you give a bit more detail?
Reply:I will prefer roses red roses
Reply:http://www.wedding-flowers-guide.com/blu...
Reply:congrats! =]
id go with white and light purple because purple looks absolutely beautiful with blue
goodluck
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Name of mikasa pattern cup w/b white outside blue inside. dish would be outer edge white with blue center?
This is a discontinued pattern Outer edge of dish (approx 2') is white/alabaster while the center is light/cornflower blue. cups are all white/alabaster outside totally lt blue inside
Name of mikasa pattern cup w/b white outside blue inside. dish would be outer edge white with blue center?
http://www.replacements.com has a wonderful site. Even if you don't know the pattern name you may still find your dishes. You click "Mikasa" and then the bar on the right side of my list. You can look at dishes, and hopefully find yours. Good luck!
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Name of mikasa pattern cup w/b white outside blue inside. dish would be outer edge white with blue center?
http://www.replacements.com has a wonderful site. Even if you don't know the pattern name you may still find your dishes. You click "Mikasa" and then the bar on the right side of my list. You can look at dishes, and hopefully find yours. Good luck!
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